Thursday, September 30, 2010

I Finished INSOMNIA + *Giveaway*!

This week I got to type those beloved letters of all writerdom: The End

Before I start my favorite part of the writing process, edits and revisions, I wanted to take a day to celebrate (Also because it's my birthday on Saturday!! Yay!! It's a good week for Jenn!!).

So, I'm giving away a copy of a book my sons and I read together this summer: "Percy Jackson & The Olympians: The Lightning Thief" + another book that I haven't decided on yet. It's almost October, we'll call it the "Mystery Book" ooh!

I'm going to keep this simple. All you have to do to enter is:

1 - comment and be a follower (1 point)

Simple, right?! Now, if you want extra points, you can advertise this contest somewhere: twitter, facebook, your blog, your kids t-shirt, wherever. Just make sure you let me know you did it.

Now, just for fun, I'm posting the current first page of INSOMNIA. Keep in mind, it's still a little rough, but let me know if it intrigues you. Most of the questions are answered in the first chapter, but not the first page. So having questions is a good thing. :) This contest ends next Monday at midnight PST and I'll announce the winner on Tuesday, October 5th.

Okay so, here is the excerpt.

Chapter 1: Dreamlife

I was thirteen when I learned about rage. When I first felt the hatred and adrenaline that can trump fear just enough to turn a normal man into a murderer; the thrill that comes from ending my enemy’s ability to hurt me, and the sickness that follows after. The transformation that insures you will never be the same person again.

I was no murderer, but one night in March, my Dreamer was.

For a week after, I stayed home from school sick. Faking it was unnecessary, turns out that throwing up constantly is pretty convincing. Even awake, the visions from the dream haunted me: a blood-stained knife, red slices through her white shirt that formed a perfect triangle, the girl’s screams.

The emotions of the killer bothered me the most—fury, triumph, and then despair. I didn’t want to feel it. I hated my ability.

I consoled myself with the knowledge that it wasn’t real. It was only a dream. People could dream anything and it was all over when they woke up. It worked, I felt better for a while—until I saw the picture of the victim on the news. Most dreams stay in the mind, but some refuse to remain in that prison.

Since then, I’ve gotten much better at telling the difference.


That's where the first page ends. What do you think? Intrigued or totally confused? Do tell.


  1. Okay, I would TOTALLY keep reading, Jenn. What a powerful first page! Love it! Seriously.

    Count me in for the contest. I'll post to FB from my home computer and I'll link in my sidebar. :-)

  2. Yay! Congrats on finishing! I'm SO EXCITED for you. Finishing feels so great:)

  3. Yea on finishing!! I'm with you that editing is much preferable to drafting. (Yuck.) Guess what? My birthday is Saturday, too! We rock.

  4. I'm definitely intrigued! I'd keep reading. And congrats on typing the end! I got to do that recently too, and it's definitely a great feeling!

  5. I'd say intriguing! Way to go!

  6. I'd want to read more for sure. I'm so jealous of your "the end." I love Percy Jackson.

  7. You finished?! Hooray! When do I get to read the rest?? You left me hanging right in the middle, but I didn't bug you about it assuming you had writers block. Now I'm antsy to read the last half!

  8. YAY!!!!! I can't wait to read this. No really, give it. :) I LOVE the first page. Happy early birthday. I forgot you were an October baby too.

  9. So intriguing!

    Woo hoo! Congrats on THE END Jenn!!! That is super, super news! =D

  10. Intrigued. Congrats for finishing the first draft. Major milestone. It's time to celebrate. Plus--Happy Birthday!

  11. Great hook.

    R. W. Ware

  12. Congratulations, Jenn! I'm so jealous! I hope to be able to type The End this month or next, but right now it seems like it will never happen!

  13. Thanks,everyone! I'm glad my hook seems to be working. Muahaha. ;)

    Carrie - Yes, I'm sorry I left you hanging, but since you are still interested, I'll start sending you chapters next week. :) Thanks!

    Thanks for stopping by everyone. I really appreciate the feedback. :)

  14. HEY! My birthday is on Saturday, too! YAY for October babies :-)

    Love this opening, BTW. You're right about it raising questions. I really like that tension is evoked right from the first line.

    For revision, you might try tightening a few of the sentences. Limiting the use of words like "much" and "that," for example. It'll heighten the suspense you already have on the page.

    Congrats on typing those wonderful last two words, and happy early birthday ;-)

  15. Congratulations on finishing. Definitely take the time to celebrate. Writing has few milestones before publications, but completing a novel is so totally one of them.

    I'll save the critique for the What If Writers, but do want to wish you a Happy Birthday!

    - - changeling

  16. Congrats on finishing! That is really HUGE!!!!!!!

  17. Congrats on finishing and happy b-day!

  18. Congrats. Great hook for the start too :)

  19. Yay! Congrats! And Happy Birthday! You have all kinds of reasons to celebrate.

    Love the opening!

  20. Congratulations, Jenn! My sister in darkness! I'm so proud and happy for you! And you know I'm all intrigued!

  21. Congrats on finishing your book! :) Happy Birthday, and your book sounds amazing!! I would definitely keep reading!